Monday, April 18, 2016

Ode to basketball
It is great to hear thee bounce on the court
It's great to smell your scent
You are like my bro

You help get my mind off things
It is great to be alone with you
I like to see you everyday
Swoosh, Swoosh, Swoosh

That's your sound
You smell fresh and new
You are bright orange too
You also have black lining

You help me to look forward to a great future
You have helped me through a lot
Without thee I don't know what I would do
O basketball you are like a friend







1 comment:

  1. To make the poem stronger, take out the "Also" at the start of lines 3 and 13. I love the onomatopoeia and smell imagery.

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    20/30 pts

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